10 thoughts on “Page 304

  1. One-eyed Mike

    Yes, this is even better than the first draft – which was pretty good too. Well done for improving it.

    I had a problem thought. Some poor kid was trying out the drone he got for his birthday … and a nasty girl smashed his lovely present. Cue Daddy and four brothers approaching with baseball bats …

    No. Not seriously. Too much of a coincidence.

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    1. Observer

      Her IFF system (another little upgrade that she happens to have) identified it as an NSA drone. (Maybe Steven added that after you commented?)

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      1. steven Post author

        no the little NSA thing was there when I first posted the page, it’s not super important but it does help to explain stuff without me interrupting the flow to explicitly spell stuff out, which I may have a tendency to do and I’m trying to not do 🙂

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        1. Arthur Frayn

          One small issue. Is her targeting system scoping the distance of the NSA drone at 64 meters and its speed at 4 *Miles Per Hour*? If her system uses metric, 4 mph is 6.437 kilometers per hour.

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          1. steven Post author

            it’s true you’re right, but I didn’t want to write 64 yards, I don’t know it just feels like that would sound like she’s doing sports… 🙂
            the reason I used mph was because she was made in America… but maybe I could write km/h instead as I understand American military does use that?

    1. steven Post author

      Vestine always buys all the cool upgrades when she buys something, it’s a compulsion of hers
      It’s like forking out for full armor protection on your Chevy Suburban, even if you never use it 🙂

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      1. Stephen Foster

        Or, possibly, the manufacturer also builds military robots; those functions are already part of the “brain”. No need to reinvent the wheel if you already have a useable part.

        “The Windup Girl” by Paolo Bachigalupi has a sex toy with a combat grade skeleton.

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